Saturday, November 2, 2013

Entry 9 (End / Phoenix Chapter 1)

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[This concludes Chapter One of Phoenix: The Time Keeper.  I hope you have all enjoyed reading it. Next time I post I plan to post a little bit from another novel I'm working on.]
 
I knew I wanted to comfort her and take away her annoyance.  It was something I was the best at.  My hands were like magic, or so she’d told me.
      My partner tapped his knuckle upon the window next to me and I looked up before reaching down to the knob, watching the glass as it vanished between the metal.
      “What d’ya say we get outta here and get a cold one?”  He asked, and I could only nod.
      I heard the door slam and the engine rev.  I felt the movement of the car, but at first my mind wouldn’t leave Garnet.  I thought of her lying there on the pavement in her own blood.  I felt sick to my stomach.

9 comments:

  1. Sorry I missed the previous snippets.

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    1. I posted all of them in this post, you should go back and read them.

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  2. Nice description. I can feel his distress over her death. Well done!
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  3. Oh wow, this is powerful. Nice eight that has me wondering many things!

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  4. Very melancholy excerpt, good details. Great 8!

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  5. Oh my, I'm going to have to go back and read the other snippets - very intriguing.

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    1. They are all linked in this post. I hope you enjoy them.

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  6. Yeah, there's a powerful disconnect here, which makes sense if she's dead. Thanks for sharing!

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