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[This concludes Chapter One of Phoenix: The Time Keeper. I hope you have all enjoyed reading it. Next time I post I plan to post a little bit from another novel I'm working on.]
I knew I wanted to comfort her and
take away her annoyance. It was something
I was the best at. My hands were like
magic, or so she’d told me.
My
partner tapped his knuckle upon the window next to me and I looked up before
reaching down to the knob, watching the glass as it vanished between the metal.
“What
d’ya say we get outta here and get a cold one?”
He asked, and I could only nod.
I
heard the door slam and the engine rev.
I felt the movement of the car, but at first my mind wouldn’t leave Garnet.
I thought of her lying there on the
pavement in her own blood. I felt sick
to my stomach.
Sorry I missed the previous snippets.
ReplyDeleteI posted all of them in this post, you should go back and read them.
DeleteNice description. I can feel his distress over her death. Well done!
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Oh wow, this is powerful. Nice eight that has me wondering many things!
ReplyDeleteVery melancholy excerpt, good details. Great 8!
ReplyDeleteOh my, I'm going to have to go back and read the other snippets - very intriguing.
ReplyDeleteThey are all linked in this post. I hope you enjoy them.
DeleteNice intensity!
ReplyDeleteYeah, there's a powerful disconnect here, which makes sense if she's dead. Thanks for sharing!
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