There she was, my lovely Garnet. Her hair sparkled like the jewel of her name; it was dyed to match. Her lips bled rivers of red, so beautiful I wanted to kiss them just once more. It was hard to believe she was there before me with a smile upon her voluptuous lips. Her already pale skin was becoming paler, like a ghost, but tinted a lighter shade of slate blue.
As I crouched
above her, the sun caught the glimmer upon the cracked pavement throwing red
within my eyes that burned like acid. The
wind blew my dark bangs across my face, poking my right eye. It stung like the sting of a scorpion.
Grrrr I want more....
ReplyDeleteIf you are lucky, and I don't forget... I will post another 8 sentences next Sunday. Make sure you tweet me to remind me @lylathewicked
DeleteBeautifully descriptive, loved it!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you liked it! I will try to post more of my works for you to read! Perhaps another 8 sentences to this for next Sunday. If you like my writing, don't forget to check out my writing exercise blog: http://otoss.blogspot.com
DeleteIntriguing and such a terrific description, drenched with color. Excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for your kind review. I will try to post another 8 sentences next Sunday, remind me on my twitter @lylathewicked If you're interested in reading more of my stuff, check out my writing exercise blog, it's full of short stories. http://otoss.blogspot.com
DeleteInteresting snippet! Very dark. Obviously she's dead. I'm curious what he is exactly planning.
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It is very dark. The idea of the story is for it to be set in a sort of Noir type setting, thus it needs darkness. ;) I am glad you enjoyed it. If you're interested in reading more of my stuff, check out my writing exercise blog: http://otoss.blogspot.com Also, remind me to post another 8 sentences to this story next Sunday by tweeting me @lylathewicked
DeleteYou've packed a lot of information into a few sentences. Well done :-)
ReplyDeleteI'm glad it's captured your interest. Check out more of my work at http://otoss.blogspot.com And remind me to post another 8 sentences to this story next Sunday by tweeting me @lylathewicked
DeleteVery interesting. Is she dead?
ReplyDeleteCould be...If you'd like to read more of this, I will post another 8 sentences next Sunday, remind me by tweeting to me @lylathewicked
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