Phoenix: The Time Keeper
I reached into the glove compartment and found
a pack of cigarettes and a lighter. I
wasn’t a smoker, but I thought “What the hell.”
I lit up a stick and pushed it between my lips taking a long drag. I coughed as my virgin lungs rejected the
smoke.
Though I knew Garnet was
gone, my mind kept reeling over the night before. Her silky violet sheets and our bodies
pressed between them. The heat between
us made my mouth water. I could remember
her breath against my sweaty chest, all warm and peaceful as she slept.----------------------------
Sorry it's been a few weeks since I've done an update. I just wasn't feeling it. I've just been trying to relax a lot this summer. I guess that last semester burnt me out more than I thought. I'm finally starting to get back into the swing of things. I got a few books I need to read this summer to get ahead on my fall literature reading. So far, I've completed 0 reads, but almost completed 1...that being the Scarlet Letter. I wish we were reading more Noir. I feel I could use more exposure to help me continue with this story. Hope you like the update!
Intriguing snippet makes one wonder what happened, why Garnet had left. Definitely tells the reader that the previous night was enjoyable. Well done.
ReplyDeleteRead the previous snippets that are linked in the post and it'll appear more clear. ;)
DeleteNice one! Now I'm thinking about silky violet sheets. :)
ReplyDeleteCharley
I like the yearning and regret in this -- One wonders why the narrator had to leave (or thought they did).
ReplyDelete(I had to read The Scarlet Letter four times in college--by my senior year, I looked forward to Dimmesdale's death, emo goop that he is)
Read the previous snippets that are linked in the post and it'll appear more clear. ;)
DeleteMust have been a good night for it to call for a cigarette. I curious to know what transpired. 'The Scarlet Letter' is good read.
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DeletePoor Garnet! Poignant details and I love the image of the silky violet sheets. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks for your feedback as always Veronica! ;)
DeleteI like the cigarette touch. He doesn't smoke, but it shows being with Garnet the night before was special and warranted something ceremonial.
ReplyDeleteLove it...the virgin lungs comment was right on.
ReplyDeletevery sensual post. Nice job :-)
ReplyDeleteI'm wondering why he tried to smoke. Is he trying to remember her because she does?
ReplyDeleteHe's trying to replace the sick feeling in his stomach with something else, since he just got finished looking at her corpse.
DeleteDefinitely an intriguing eight there.
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