tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post8696830185241220388..comments2013-11-08T04:05:51.003-08:00Comments on Snippet Sundays: Entry 4Otohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16207138254141194849noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-28394909947934022882013-05-05T21:02:07.138-07:002013-05-05T21:02:07.138-07:00Nice excerpt. Interesting and intense.Nice excerpt. Interesting and intense.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00828984619591897291noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-17541688024836499102013-05-05T19:17:18.183-07:002013-05-05T19:17:18.183-07:00Awesome, I'm glad you like it so much! I will ...Awesome, I'm glad you like it so much! I will be posting more next weekend! Keep up the feedback and I will keep writing it.Otohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16207138254141194849noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-50334727969087819952013-05-05T14:11:56.858-07:002013-05-05T14:11:56.858-07:00This is intense... I can feel his anger through th...This is intense... I can feel his anger through the words. I went back and read the previous posts, because I wanted more! Thanks for posting :) I'm eager to read more.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02950642717131117241noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-1863961571823317202013-05-05T13:36:17.620-07:002013-05-05T13:36:17.620-07:00A lot of emotion blasting from Phoenix, that comes...A lot of emotion blasting from Phoenix, that comes through loud and clear in the writing! Excellent excerpt...Veronica Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04732940088047026021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-41466015138540864752013-05-05T13:11:55.245-07:002013-05-05T13:11:55.245-07:00Yeah definitely going to have to do some research ...Yeah definitely going to have to do some research a bit for this one. It's going to be a fun project though. Also you are absolutely right about the Time Keeper. ;)Otohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16207138254141194849noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-88005509059653913852013-05-05T11:51:58.318-07:002013-05-05T11:51:58.318-07:00Oh a noir. I like those! I'm guessing thee Tim...Oh a noir. I like those! I'm guessing thee Time Keeper is a killer who brands his victim's palms with a symbol? You got something going here. You don't need to be a detective, just do a it of research on the detecting process. You'll get it. Keep at it. :)<br /><br /><a href="http://historysleuth.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">History Sleuth's Writings</a>HistorySleuthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05502098938801373264noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-51388017577524765972013-05-05T11:20:12.348-07:002013-05-05T11:20:12.348-07:00Oh, sure. Phoenix will just take that advice and s...Oh, sure. Phoenix will just take that advice and skip on home. NOT. Nice!Jhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11457235963917206588noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-16699993889488405752013-05-05T11:20:08.155-07:002013-05-05T11:20:08.155-07:00This is my first visit and you've definitely c...This is my first visit and you've definitely caught my attention. It seems you've captured his emotions well.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-19163441274367638562013-05-05T10:13:54.746-07:002013-05-05T10:13:54.746-07:00Good snippet. Tighten it (You will pay Timekeeper....Good snippet. Tighten it (You will pay Timekeeper.) and keep going.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-25594224593605940672013-05-05T08:59:39.734-07:002013-05-05T08:59:39.734-07:00Super eight. Drop a couple of the I's to tight...Super eight. Drop a couple of the I's to tighten. Majanka is right. Make it up.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-77984225089984655762013-05-05T06:33:24.415-07:002013-05-05T06:33:24.415-07:00Phoenix sounds like a very formidable foe. Payback...Phoenix sounds like a very formidable foe. Payback could be hell!Gem Sivadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01233835029255570402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-89506189833205551382013-05-05T05:59:27.516-07:002013-05-05T05:59:27.516-07:00I'm a big fan of revenge fiction. (rubbing han...I'm a big fan of revenge fiction. (rubbing hands) I'm rooting for Phoenix! Sharon Buchbinder, Romance Authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02848087216042290453noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-83993102215154102022013-05-05T00:38:44.607-07:002013-05-05T00:38:44.607-07:00I can agree with that, "pay for your sins&quo...I can agree with that, "pay for your sins" is very clichê. This is suppose to be a kind of noir like The Maltese Falcon or Red Harvest by Dashiell Hammett, but I don't know how well it's going to pull that off since I've never been a detective. It's definitely a trick for me to figure out. I appreciate the feedback!Otohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16207138254141194849noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-21541763304183306942013-05-05T00:35:30.764-07:002013-05-05T00:35:30.764-07:00What genre is this? It sounds paranormal, with the...What genre is this? It sounds paranormal, with the "Time Keeper", but I'm curious if it is paranormal or not. I like the snippet, although "I will make you pay for your sins" is maybe not the best way to put it. It kind of misses its impact because it's used so much in TV and books already. I think if you just put "I will make you pay" the impact will be stronger. Really like the rest of the snippet though. :) Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03239110434858103303noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-58911024342379119892013-05-04T17:43:26.022-07:002013-05-04T17:43:26.022-07:00Probably not a good idea to send Phoenix away how ...Probably not a good idea to send Phoenix away how is feeling at the moment. He's liable to do something rash...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7763016593663001893.post-85177096482127045482013-05-04T13:54:38.540-07:002013-05-04T13:54:38.540-07:00Intriguing. I don't think Phoenix will just go...Intriguing. I don't think Phoenix will just go home and watch DVDs or read a book. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04556031831830621195noreply@blogger.com